Fangala the Flying Feline

Aw, that was sweet! I loved this; it was so gentle and warm and fuzzy after the heartrending drama of Beautifully Evil. However, I got pretty confused about the Oath. ...

Awesome, canis! That last part made my heart flutter. Very cool. However, I must complain that you're still telling, not showing. Maybe an example would make it easier to understand. ...

I like Talulah! Great job, canis. Let me just point out a few things I noticed. Your paragraphs are really long. This isn't necessarily bad, but I think people in ...

Hey there. You're an amazing writer, but I have to say I was a little disappointed with this part. It's basically a list of farm chores--feed the chickens, pet the ...

Woohoo! I love wolf stories. This is a beautiful piece, and I really can't see anything wrong with it. My only complaint is the italics. Don't get me wrong; I ...

Great start! Um...could there possibly be more to this? You really pulled me in, but I wanted to keep reading. Aside from the shortness, there's nothing wrong. You have vivid ...

Lovely. And by the way, I love your avatar. :D So you normally write rhyming poetry, huh? Great, me too. I love rhymes. And believe it or not, but this ...

Hi, Pawprint! I always love reading your work, and I'm glad you have a longer chapter with a title. :D I really enjoyed this. However, something doesn't work for me ...

Wow! First off, let me say that you have some grammar issues, and some of your rhymes seem forced, but the emotion makes up for that. I'm glad that you ...

Aw, I love this! This poem brings up wonderful memories for me. Not only that--it's beautifully written. I think you do free verse quite nicely (I'm normally a rhyming person.) ...

I'll bet a million dollars that you've read Maximum Ride. If so, I can tell. You have some serious James Patterson going on in your writing, and, quite frankly...I LOVE ...

Hi! I saw that nobody had reviewed this yet, and I was like, BWAHAHA, I get to be first! :D I really liked this. It almost made me laugh, because ...

Wow. Interesting poem. Overall, I thought it was nice, but it seemed a little choppy and repetitive. The wind in the willows She sits and waits for a song to ...

Oh, yay, Ayra--your first poem! I have to agree with everybody else, but I think that this is stunning for your first poem. (You don't want to see my first ...

So you're not sure you like this? I love it! I also love warmth. :D The line about your cat being a space heater is especially gorgeous, but the effect ...